Pamela – FEEDBACK ON CHILDREN’S STORY PLEASE

Pamela – FEEDBACK ON CHILDREN’S STORY PLEASE

Ella Acorn – a Children’s Book

Ella Acorn was sitting perched on top of her Mother’s highest branches, watching as one, after another, of her brothers and sisters took the journey from the safety of Mother’s arms, to the wildly exciting, and darkly mysterious forest floor far, far below!

“Ouch!” Ella could barely hear, as the words wafting up through Mother’s Arms. “Watch out for that big hard thing I bounced off of, it hurts!” Elizabeth hollered to her family as one after another leapt from Mother’s arms.

“Wheeeee, look at Meeee, I’m Flying.. bye-bye everyone!”

“Oh No!” Ella exclaimed,“that was Allison, Mother, where is she going?” Ella watched as a big bird swooped down and took Allison right out of the air and then flew off onto the sky away from everyone.

“Mother, I am not ready to leave, what if I can’t find my feet, Ella whimpered quietly.

“I don’t want to leave!”

“My darling little Acorn, we all must take that first step to a new life.”

“But Mother, what if something goes wrong, and I can’t find my feet?”

Mother swaying gently, and with barely a breath if air whispered, “You have listened to everything I could teach you about the trip you are about to take, as long as you were listening very closely you’ll get planted properly!“

With those words of advice Ella, looked adoringly at her mother and said, “One day I am going to be a big Sequoia Tree just like you are Mother.”

Then, looking back one last time, with a smile on her face, Ella jumped into the unknown!

Ella had jumped with so much glee, she bounced and tumbled, off branch after branch, down she went. One branch almost caught her again, but she remembered what Mother had said, to roll a bit and wiggle, and when she did that, she was able to get the fingers that held her so tightly to spread apart just enough to let her through.

As Ella looked down she could see that big thing Elizabeth must have been talking about.. “it looks like it’ll hurt if I land on it?”

So, a bit of a turn and Ella was headed for the soft pile of needles that mother had prepared for them to help soften their landing.

That was quite the journey little Ella Acorn had to take, her bumpy travel from so high up in her Mother’s arms to the soft duff of the forest floor below.

Looking up at Mother swaying so gracefully above her, Ella asked her, Mother, what am I to do now? Very gently she heard her Mother say:

“Sleep my child, things will all work out, you are young and need time!”

It was such a hard trip, jumping from Mothers arms that little Ella just knew her Mother was. right, she needed to have a rest!

So burying as deeply under the blanket laid out by her Mother, Ella closed her eyes, and let nature feed her well helping to make keep her strong while she got some needed sleep.

TO BE CONTINUED

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